Thursday 18 January, 2007
Todays prompt for Poetry Thursday "are you using a line on me?" is predicated on the notion of finding inspiration in one line from another participant’s poem and use that line as a jumping-off place for your own poem.
WORDS
Words, jumbled, ricochet
Off the walls of my
Skull.
Searching to escape
In iambic pentameter,
They rearrange themselves,
Testing new meanings.
Like orbs, floating, colliding,
tumbling, falling.
Suspended over me,
descending, rising
like bodies in perpetual motion___
Images embedded in syntax
Until they say what I meant__
Exactly what I meant.
Thank you bb for coaching this accumulation of words out of my mind with this line "other bodies tumble and fall over us," from your poem "Burning"
posted by rel at 6:45 AM
19 Comments:
Right here with this poem, they bend to your will.
Very good rel
Good morning Rel:-) Playing catch up today...AGAIN lol Loved all the pictures you took the other day...it sure does look pretty when there's a fresh snowfall. The cold snap seems to be affecting a lot of us but today and tomorrow it's supposed to be a bit milder but then back into frigid temps by Saturday again. Loved your Words poem! Have a terrific day Rel and stay warm!! Hugs xox
Hi Rel,
Coming over for a taste of your words. Wow! All these big words rolling over and being wrestled into submission by a big, strong, handsome man. *blushes*
I hope you have a great day my friend.
Rose
xo
Rel, I like your poem. When connected to your exercise of the body, I can see that the workout of the mind is just as important.
you did me proud ;-)
This is a great poem! I lvoe poems about writing poems...and I especially love this line: "Images embedded in syntax"
Boy, you just described the mess my mind creates before it sorts the words in a better order. Unfortunately, I don't feel like I ever get to the place where my words say exactly what I meant. Nice poem.
What a good poem, Rel. I suck completely at writing poetry, but I love to read it.
Hey! Nice job. Obviously the possibilities are endless. I like the picture you posted with this. Fun to look at.
Rel - you've really said what you meant in this one. Playful and truthful all at once!
Great poem, Rel. I just cannot do poetry - only the naughty limericks! hehe!
I enjoyed your poem very much, Rel...thanks for sharing it with us. I enjoy poetry, both the reading of it and the writing of it.
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I can always count on your blog to get my poetry fix.
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I hope the angels are smiling on you whereever you are, Rel.
Words words words. Excellent poem and photo.
It seems to me that the words "tumbled" out "just right" in this brilliant poem :-)
(again, thanks for letting me steal your lines)
What a great poem, using bb's line and running with it! Good job, Rel. You're really embracing poetry these days and it's a wonderful thing to see (and read).
these "stick on words," are addictive!! I am enjoying your poems!!
very nice Rel. As soon as I seent he pic I started making words out of the tiles....lol. I play scrabble online a lot....I seen words , sword, lords...Im hooked on scrabble.
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