Saturday, April 05, 2008


Comes it fleeting, like a butterfly

Elusive to the touch as steam,

Leaving my fervent heart to cry;
Safer this, enjoyed as a dream.

Therein the fragrance of her peppered hair

As we lay beside the limpid lake
Listening to the nickering mare

Knowing, wishing to be late

These dreams and images, but a test

Within my fervid heart to create

A tangled, mind numbing mess.

These racing thoughts do not sedate.

They force the wakened mind to scheme;

Limbs entwined, twisted wicker.

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Blogger paisley said...

good use of wicker.. that is the one that kept me from posting mine.....

10:07 PM  
Blogger Head Cookie said...

Remi this is a great and creative post.

10:23 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

the bout-rimes words work so well, I almost forgot they were not your words. sounds like a sweet dream

10:30 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

You turned those words into so much more than they were!

11:41 PM  
Blogger Gemma Wiseman said...

Your words softly flow around like a magic dream.


5:11 AM  
Blogger Carole Burant said...

Good morning dear Rel:-) Hope this finds you happy and healthy!! Always a pleasure to catch up with you and read your wonderful poems and such. You always leave me in awe with the way you have with words. I just read your poem regarding your dad...truly amazing and from the heart. xox

8:37 AM  
Blogger poefusion said...

Nickering mare, that's great. I love what you did with these words. You've made this such fun. And, what a beautiful dream. I am sure you did not want to wake from this one. Have a nice day.

9:47 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

This is great! Love the entwined lomb like wicker.

It's interesting to see how the end words triggered other similar words in each of these poems I read, but with different poetic results. Yours is a lovely romance.

12:41 PM  
Blogger Tammy Brierly said...

I've been catching up on your Poefusion poems and I'm really impressed. I'm loving all the poetry blooming here in blogland.

Have a relaxed weekend! XXOO

5:05 PM  
Blogger Churlita said...

Once again, your poems are perfect for the prompts.

12:59 AM  

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