Thursday, May 31, 2007


St. Lawrence river

Dawn creeps dimly through the mist.


Sitting by the window
In the cottage
The river is smooth
As a pane of glass.
First light reflecting
The serenity of new
Day's beginning.

Trilling, chirping, cawing
Winged wonders
Herald the morning light.
Come see, tweet tweet
Come see.
Stillness and calm infuse the senses.

Lakers plow the fleuve
Sending undulating
Patterns of water
To roll upon the shore
Whispering......
Make a wish, make a wish...
Follow me.

The train across the span
Clickety clacks
Whoooooting it's passing.
Travelers along
The river shore
Going there, or
Coming back.

Steadfast in its changing
the river flows.
Always and never
The same.
Friend today, foe tomorrow.
Tugging at your lifeline
Evoking fear and fondness.

Kayak glides silently
From river edge
Floating effortlessly to
Hypnotic quietude.
Peaceful bliss of
calm water
Replenishes the soul.

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28 Comments:

Anonymous Rose Dewy Knickers said...

(((Rel)))

What a calming and wondrous image of the river you've created. I can sit myself down on your bank and indulge my senses in your world. Thanks. :)

Rose

xo

7:27 AM  
Anonymous Brian said...

"Lakers". Now that is a word that brings back a flood of memories. Thanks Rel, it's good to have the chance to savor your poetry once more.

7:56 AM  
Anonymous gel(emerald eyes) said...

Soothing and reassuring.
I, too, love the water. Your words evoke the image in your photo.

8:39 AM  
Blogger Chipper said...

That describes that picture and it's surroundings perfectly!! Can't wait to visit again :)

8:52 AM  
Blogger Crafty Green Poet said...

I like your use of repitition, it fits the river and its birds.

8:56 AM  
Blogger twitches said...

The repetition is nice - gives one the sensation of rippling water.

9:05 AM  
Blogger gautami tripathy said...

This poem replenished my soul. Calming and soothing.

Thanks rel!

9:39 AM  
Blogger pepektheassassin said...

Rel, reading this is like listening to music.

11:02 AM  
Blogger Tammy said...

Hi Rel!
This flowed like your river on a lovely day. Beautiful images you have brought to our mind's.

BTW one of my peony bushes is white with the dark pink streak too. HUGS

11:19 AM  
Blogger Rowan said...

I love this poem - it brings a feeling of peace and serenity and makes me see what you are seeing.

12:17 PM  
Blogger paris parfait said...

Your poem is beautiful and peaceful, flowing like a river - an idyllic one. Fantastic job, Rel! xo

12:41 PM  
Blogger chicklegirl said...

The rhythm of this mimicked that of the river. Very smooth, soothing, but with something darker under the surface.

2:39 PM  
Blogger jim said...

Funny how we don't hear those river-attendant sounds if we ourselves cannot slow down to the pace of the river itself. The aural qualities are so fine here, fitting.

3:14 PM  
Blogger Becca said...

This is so serene, Rel, I could feel myself just easing into the quiet river mood. Very haiku like, actually.

Beautiful :)

4:41 PM  
Blogger jellyhead said...

This makes me want to buy a kayak and go paddling!

5:38 PM  
Blogger Churlita said...

I was going to tell you how well I thought your river poem flowed, but someone already beat me to it.

It really was beautiful.

6:37 PM  
Blogger Clockworkchris said...

Great imagery-Next to last verse says it all. What a poem. Sorry this is short but I have tons of work to do before I sleep, price of vacations I supose.

8:47 PM  
Blogger Lee said...

I'm there! I'm there! Sitting on the banks, sipping on champagne...ahhhhh....

9:35 PM  
Blogger sputnik said...

Rel, I especially like the spare line forms, which are so meditative. Also, all of the stanzas are seven lines except the second one--the anomaly is the only stanza that deals with bird sounds but doesn't directly reference the more elemental water; I found that so interesting, kind of "sunken" among the other stanzas and hardly noticeable. And there's also the subtle anomaly of the very real danger of a river ("friend today, foe tomorrow") that, on its surface, seems so serene.

11:15 PM  
Blogger ...deb said...

Mezmerizing, Rel, those sounds and sights. I want to be on that river in all its complexity.

1:25 AM  
Blogger Puss-in-Boots said...

What a peaceful poem, Rel. Thank you for that.

4:31 AM  
Blogger January said...

I felt as if I was there with the narrator all through the poem. Love these lines in particular:

"Make a wish, make a wish...
Follow me."

Lovely!

5:40 AM  
Blogger Catch said...

Its beautiful Rel...water always has such a hypnotic effect...I could just sit and watch the ripples for hours. And you have really brought it home with this poem. Good job!!!

We have had a cabin for years...my Father dearly loved it, I hated it...no phones, too quiet for me. One year he bought 4 horses and I have to say that was the greatest thing....I loved the horses and rode constantly... I wish I had just stuck with the horses, they are so much more loyal than some men...lol. Other than having the horses I never had much interest in the cabin, still dont. We were always running from the cabin to the boat and never got to stay home for a summer, which was all I wanted to do...I think thats why I enjoy my home so much. We were on that friggen boat for 4 weeks one summer on a boat trip down the Mississippi. No wonder I am such a homebody!

8:00 AM  
Blogger Eleanor said...

I was feeling a tad frazzled when I sad down here today, but now I'm in a calm, peaceful place. Thanks, Rel! :)

Such a beautiful poem, and such beautiful images evoked. And I don't just mean the accompanying photos. You just keep getting better and better!!

1:33 PM  
Blogger Philip. said...

What a lovely poem!

5:14 PM  
Blogger Regina Clare Jane said...

My first chance to read this, Rel, but it was worth the wait! How beautiful- it made me take a deep breath. I would like to be sitting there with you, in your little cottage, looking at that peaceful river...

5:45 PM  
Blogger chiefbiscuit said...

A river of truly oceanic proportions and a poem with some fantastic portions! (Although in actual fact the whole of the poem is wondrous!)

12:40 AM  
Anonymous KG said...

This poem is all about peace. I leave with this feeling after reading it. Many thanks. :)

11:08 PM  

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