Thursday, June 28, 2007







The sun, sliding through
A coin slot before it sets.
Dense air on far shore.

22 Comments:

Blogger Crafty Green Poet said...

I like this one!

5:49 AM  
Blogger Pauline said...

I like the coin-slot thought...

5:52 AM  
Blogger paris parfait said...

The photograph, along with the "coin slot" image in your haiku? Bravo, Rel.

6:38 AM  
Blogger Hedwyg said...

Oh - that's wonderful! What a fun, playful image.

8:22 AM  
Blogger Tinamtl said...

I love image with poetry. Beautiful.

8:37 AM  
Blogger Regina Clare Jane said...

The "coin slot" imagery is wonderful- it's almost excatly like that!
Clever, Rel!

9:51 AM  
Anonymous gautami tripathy said...

I too agree. That coin slot imagery is to good.

10:47 AM  
Blogger pepektheassassin said...

Hi rel! Hi ku--I agree. the sun through the coin slot is a fantastic image. A fine poem! A great example of striking a match to illuminate something very brightly for a moment--which is what haiku is supposed to do, I think.

11:07 AM  
Blogger Churlita said...

I love the photo and I love the poem - double bonus.

11:54 AM  
Blogger Tammy said...

A "coin slot" was wonderful Rel! I want to come soak up that stillness. Nice! XXOO

12:33 PM  
Anonymous split ends said...

Yes--the coin slot phrase works well, and the picture enhances the poem. You've caught that magical moment perfectly!

12:40 PM  
Blogger Rob Kistner said...

Very cool haiku Rel... loved the photo!

3:00 PM  
Blogger jellyhead said...

That is a fabulous haiku, Rel. Loved it so much I was forced to comment!

5:10 PM  
Blogger PEA said...

Only a few words but meaning so very much! Wonderful my friend, just wonderful!!! xox

5:15 PM  
Blogger ...deb said...

Yes, yes! Jackpot.

7:48 PM  
Anonymous KG said...

The sun sliding through a coin slot...so powerful and original! That makes so much sense in a visual way. I got a new view out of your "Hi Ku" (LOL).

10:33 PM  
Blogger chicklegirl said...

No deposit, no return, right? Nice poem (and the picture was breathtaking!)

12:08 AM  
Blogger Abzdragon said...

"coin slot" is an amazing phrase to describe it... love this image!

12:39 AM  
Blogger Clare said...

Beautiful photo, and the haiku created such a wonderful visual for me!

2:29 AM  
Blogger Puss-in-Boots said...

Rel

Oh, you poetic soul, you...

3:51 AM  
Blogger Lee said...

My mind is in a whirl. I must write some more poetry to help get every thing into perpestive. Thanks, Rel. :)

4:20 AM  
Anonymous gel(emerald eyes) said...

I want to be there!
Such a beautiful "hi ku." ("Eye" noticed that on the PT link thread, "yew".):)

4:46 AM  

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