I saw you in the window
I saw you in the window.
Were you really there?
Or merely a reflection;
A phantom, a fleeting glare?
Were you really there?
Or merely a reflection;
A phantom, a fleeting glare?
Captured by the window's pane
For a split second
In time?
For a split second
In time?
Caught by my eye a gazing there,
You hurried by, noticing not,
Neither window nor I.
But through that window's other view,
He saw us, and I saw you;
Together, you and I.
You hurried by, noticing not,
Neither window nor I.
But through that window's other view,
He saw us, and I saw you;
Together, you and I.
posted by rel at 11:47 AM
15 Comments:
It's always fun to come read your poems Rel.... still not sure if I captured the meaning of this one, but I *think* I did.
Hope you've had a great day :)
Jellyhead,
Thanks for the uplift.
You're lack of "capture" is understandable; my last two poems have been obtuse, and that's being kind. For me, if I have to explain a poem than I haven't done the job.
It may have helped if I had put the prompt up that led to this poem:
""The window had other views.
(after Wislawa Szymborska'"
What I attempted to portay was what the window saw out side of itself rather than what could be seen through it by the observer.
"He" being the window.
D. retires tomorrow and my mind is slow to wrap around that concept. I'm in a mozzle and my glurion is seeping out so thanks for your kind words!
No, you won't find those words in the dictionary. You'll have to come back tomorrow to witness extreme obtusness and three more words of similar ilk. ;)
rel
Rel, this poem is really good. I love the view you have given us here. Isn't funny what all a window really does see? Thanks for participating.
Before I go I have to say I love the start you are getting on the Friday 5 words. Can't wait to see what you come up with. Have a nice night.
it puts me in mind of the window to a dream.....
rel-i liked this poem much, it sure brings on lots of meaning...such a unique perspective.
I really like the place I'm put in with this poem. Very nice and dream like.
Rel, you always have a way with words and this one is one is another excellent post. I hope D. enjoys her retirement.
Love your other view. A window's reflection can bring people together in ways some may never realise.
Gemma
I wonder how often we can understand how much we are inside reflections and how often we are not.
nice image and words to compliment the other-
..."noticing not". Yes, I window shop and even photograph images (and people) like this. And they seldom notice...
In a word, revealing. I enjoyed it.
In a word, revealing. I enjoyed it.
how many times are we superimposed with something, in someone's view. Interesting inspiration on perspective.
I like the words and fits the photo perfectly!
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