Wednesday, April 16, 2008


LXXXII


Touching
Visible
Stage

"How long's she been here Sgt.?"

"M.E. says three days, lieutenant."

"Cause of death?"

"Strangulation, no sign of a struggle neither, sir."

"Anything else Sgt.?"

"Yes sir, a note in her pocket."

"And!?"

"Well sir, it don't make no sense to me. It talks about a window, and the only window in this here alley is that stained glass with the black bird in it."

"The note.....it said?"

I saw you touching,
Visible through my window.
Your stage thought private.

picture from Deviant art. POINTILLISM birds-eye-view by KataOnik Aug 3th, 2006

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18 Comments:

Anonymous gautami tripathy said...

Windows can be destructive too...

green eyed monster

12:45 PM  
Blogger pjd said...

There's more here than I'm getting, I think, but it's haunting.

3:00 PM  
Blogger tumblewords said...

Woohoo! I love this - and the artwork is a perfect intro!

3:34 PM  
Blogger paisley said...

i am wondering what exactly they were touching... that made death ever so much more inviting.....

4:14 PM  
Blogger Remiman said...

pjd,
Think opening page of a murder mystery, Who was behind the window, what brought the woman to the alley, Why had 3 days elapsed. Where did she belong normally. How old was she, did she have family and on and on...you know the drill. ;)

One clue and one clue only: There is adultry at work here.
rel

4:54 PM  
Blogger Linda Jacobs said...

Hmmm...intriguing! Love the colloquial language!

5:15 PM  
Blogger Tammy said...

Ah adultry! Wonderful Rel and was intriqued by the artwork.

Mystery of suicide or murder...hmmm.

Love ya,

6:26 PM  
Blogger pjd said...

Ah, see, I was wondering about the supernatural with the black bird in the stained glass. I thought perhaps some symbolism of which I was ignorant. I got the murder mystery part. :-)

6:31 PM  
Blogger Lucy said...

glad to hear it's adultery and not child
abuse! great take on the prompt Rel! :)

9:01 PM  
Blogger TC said...

Makes me wonder who did it. Why. What the motive was. And how long it will take them to get caught. Well done.

9:14 PM  
Blogger anthonynorth said...

A whodunit made into an 'is there a who?'
Intriguingly done.

4:43 AM  
Blogger chiefbiscuit said...

Very clever Rel.
I have enjoyed having a read of your latest writing.
You have been churning out some quality work.
I really enjoyed your 6 word meme too - brilliant.

6:38 AM  
Blogger jadey said...

Rel,

I love coming to your blog cause all your posts keep my interest. This one has the mystery factor the who done it. Look forward to reading more. Take care.

9:17 AM  
Anonymous watermaid said...

Yes, the note suggests she's witnessed a liaison that the participants thought was unobserved. A neat piece of writing. I agree with chief biscuit.

9:30 AM  
Blogger Churlita said...

...Or maybe someone saw her touching someone else and that's why they killed her...

11:13 AM  
Anonymous Amarettogirl said...

This was so intriguing!!! Mystery and murder it reads like a great start to something bigger or a story all its own just as it is!!! Thanks for sharing it with 3ww!

11:42 AM  
Blogger Michelle Johnson said...

Great theme, adultery. I think this is one you could open up into something a bit longer, Rel. Nice job. Have a nice night. By the way, I love that picture.

7:13 PM  
Anonymous UL said...

i knew there was adultery involved, your message confirmed it.. superb.

9:39 PM  

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