Sunday, November 11, 2012

Mag #143

Verdun, 1917 by Felix Vallotton
 
 
Now here he was, cradled in the webbing seat of the uncomfortable cool cave of the C130’s cargo hold. Looking out at the sunny cumulus cloud filled sky watching the beautiful billowy clouds passing in close proximity to the plane’s window. Eddie was startled by a cloud formation that resembled a person of great stature sitting on a throne. He tried to decide if the cloud sculpture was Odin, or Zeus, or may be Neptune. No not Neptune He’d show up if they crashed in the ocean. No, No it couldn’t be God he thought. Well, He supposed it could be but anyway it was sure a curious apparition. As he continued to stare and conjure imaginings he suddenly heard a voice, a deep baritone voice and there was no mistaking that it was coming from the “God” on the cloud throne. The voice and the words were so clear, he had to look beside him to see if there was someone sitting beside him and talking to him. Nope, he was alone.


The voice said: Don’t come back this way again!



Eddie came home in 1965 and the war continued for another ten years. Interestingly, Eddie refused to watch any newscast or read any media concerning the war because when he did so he would be overcome with a strong to desire to go that way again.

21 Comments:

Blogger Tess Kincaid said...

Chills...nice write, Rel...

10:20 AM  
Blogger Gail said...

Interesting

12:30 PM  
Blogger Berowne said...

Excellent creation of a special mood...

12:34 PM  
Blogger Kathe W. said...

you captured so much of what could have been a deadly allure for Eddie. A scary glimpse of war and it's wrath.

1:14 PM  
Blogger Helen said...

Perfect timing ~ your Magpie! Just finished watching a three-part feature on Vietnam .. brought back the horror of those years. My former husband was in Da Nang during the Tet offensive. A fraternity brother was blown to bits after only six weeks 'in country' ... Absolutely!!
'don't come back this way again'

5:45 PM  
Blogger Stafford Ray said...

From what I know of God, he does encourage conflict between tribes of His Human Creation, the bastard!

6:47 PM  
Blogger ReBelle said...

Potent.

10:28 PM  
Blogger Wander said...

Nice piece of writing this

Wander

11:58 PM  
Blogger Sue J said...

Good take on this week's prompt.

2:16 AM  
Blogger kaykuala said...

"Don’t come back this way again!"

A poignant message not to be taken lightly. Human conflicts are madness. Nice write Rel!

Hank

6:46 AM  
Blogger Lyn said...

So imaginative..we must pay attention to the inner voice!

8:17 AM  
Blogger Helena said...

Ahhhhh....I like the spin on this!

And for some reason I had the picture of Marlon Brando in Apocalypse Now in my head! Too many flicks, for me, I guess!

12:02 PM  
Blogger Kutamun said...

nothing like a friendly warning at a crucial juncture . if only COLONEL kurtz had listened

6:05 PM  
Blogger Sue said...

Love the journey of this poem...and the ending works so well.

=)

6:09 PM  
Blogger rel said...

Too often it felt like Apocalypse Now.

7:29 PM  
Blogger rel said...

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7:30 PM  
Blogger Dave King said...

Great tale, chillingly well told.

4:34 AM  
Blogger Lee said...

That says it all...

9:16 PM  
Blogger hyperCRYPTICal said...

Chilling stuff of the ways of mankind...

Anna :o]

5:13 AM  
Blogger Bee's Blog said...

My heart was in my mouth as I read this good write.

9:29 AM  
Blogger Catfish Tales said...

Entering late this past week, I've only just begun to read a few other posts. Last week was GB's 'Remembrance Day', and it amazes me how many of these entries are about the Second World War. Gruesome, yes. But I had a good laugh at your ending. Cheers

8:34 AM  

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